Monday, March 27, 2017

Iron Fist Clothing

I have some problems with the Iron Fist series.
Why do Danny and Davos wear such dirty looking robes at the entrance to K'un Lun? There aren't any apprentice monks doing needlessly intricate martial arts training/laundry?
Monastery does not mean dingy. I feel like even making the assumption is insulting.
Maybe I'm wrong but I doubt it. A heavenly monastery at that.

Old iron fist (from the reel) got head to toe dark clothing that looks like ninja garb, complete with mask? New Iron Fist gets pretty(if they were cleaner) green and gold robes that look almost greasy?
Costume design for this show is weird especially since the monks who rescued him seemed to have plain but unstained orange robes.

Wednesday, January 11, 2017

WW The Girl (some violence)

I lost my job because of a girl.
I went to France because of a girl.
I got a dog because of a girl, also a lizard.

I should really learn to think for myself. Nah, other people make big decisions based on lots of thought and stuff. I just wait until a nice body part attached to a woman walks by. It's served me well. Sure, I've been in jail a few times and Jacey (my dog) has had to be dewormed more times than I can count but life isn't boring and you just roll with it and things turn out fine.

I looked over at Basilisk my bearded dragon just as the door burst in, a gun went off and his little head disappeared in a spray of blood, his body flung to the far end of his tank.
"What the frack! What the frack! What did you do to my lizard!"
The woman who walked in first turned and shot the man who followed right through the side of his skull. He fell and she turned to me. I couldn't see her eyes behind her shades but she smiled. "He shot your lizard," she explained. "We don't just do that. Sorry."

"Y-you you shot that guy." I saw her smile disappear and added quickly, "he shot Basilisk. I'm glad he's dead." I was pretty unhappy about both deaths but my mind blanked when she took off her sunglasses and shook out her long red black hair. It was happening again. I made a note to mourn Basilisk later because I was about to do something dumb.

"Hi, I'm Maddy and I want to know where-, she pulled a crumpled piece of paper a pocket in jeans that clung to her hips. "Adriana Phelps is."

I stood. "Uh, sure. I knew her a couple of years ago. I'm sure I've got a box with her shit somewhere around here. Maybe she's got the same cell number too."
After a few minutes of shoving and pulling I got the shoebox out of the hall closet. She hadn't left much. I'd only dated Adriana for a few months, just long enough for her to convince me to buy a canoo. She took the canoo. "Here it is," I said, placing the box on the coffee table.
The woman sat down crosslegged and took the top off the Jimmy Choo box. "There isn't much here is there?" she said, taking out a few bottles of dried up nail polish.

"Yep, you want me to make you some tea?"

"No, do you have an espresso machine?"

My heart skipped a beat.

Sunday, January 8, 2017

Total Rewrite

So yeah.
I need to rewrite at least seventy percent of the story. I need to change the way the main character gets involved in the mystery and I just generally need to shift a lot of stuff around and restructure it if not replace it all together.

Now I know.
It would have been better if I hadn't gotten so stuck on the work that I decided to ignore its problems until now.

The word of the day is; Perspective.

Also, Wordy Wednesdays will be returning.

Tuesday, January 3, 2017

I Know the Problems

This story has a rich young lady who goes to a patent office where there are six other young ladies and somehow they all try to solve a murder.

I didn't have to do much ploting to understand the problem. Two separate stories that converge occasionally and when they do you have to coordinate seven characters even if it's only directly from one characters' point of view? That doesn't work.

The second thing I realized is that most of the young women would have to do other things with their time besides sit around. One could go along with the rich young lady, not all of them.

The third thing is that the rich young lady has two young men who might be interested in her. One gets two appearances and the other gets three. They either need to be cut or actually be part of the story.

There. I know the problems.

Here's the stuff that might be important to readers. Don't confuse the narrative unless you know that you're doing so and you have a point. I have no reason to do so. Some say never to do so but I believe a lot of different approaches can make a good story.

A linear plot with one or two mains interacting with things means it's easier to flesh out the details. When I say linear, I don't mean one thing leads to another or chronologically. I mean that scenes connect even if they take place at different times or the correlation isn't immediately evident. A random scene here or there that doesn't immediately connect is cool. Ten might be a problem unless you have a point. There should be connections if things are going to be easy. A book can be this complex thing with many characters and changing to that characters' point of view and that's great but that might not be the way you want to go to write a straight forward story. An epic tale yes, but not something that should have a simple series of events.

Monday, January 2, 2017

Character Profiles

Sorry, nothing today.
All I determined is that using my current main character would be cool but not with my six other main characters. One or the other.

She could have a support character but not six.

I almost feel like the book could be two separate ones.

The only characters that don't mesh are these seven.

Sunday, January 1, 2017


I want to write a book that has steampunk elements and a mystery.
The main character should be female and the story should be Victorian.

 Main Character
A secretary in an organization.
A rich young lady.
A resourceful young woman.
An undercover agent for another organization who is stealing company secrets.
A group of young women who are tired of being taken advantage of.

Someone dies
A series of murders (serial killer)

The main character is suspected of the murder.
The main character(s) wants justice.

Saturday, December 31, 2016

My Plan

This is a tentative battle plan for fixing The Wind-Up Terrier in the first seven days of 2017. Things might change as I find out what I can do.

I will be brainstorming. I'll try and figure out what I wanted to do with TWUT and I will be throwing out ideas for the story as if it's not already written. I might dig out some notes about what I wanted it to be.

I'll be writing character profiles and figuring out which ones sing. I might decide that some work but not for this story. I might decide others are fillers.

It's time to write an outline. I might try to write out what I've already done and I'll write out other potential outlines. When I first started the book I had only one basic outline of what should happen chapter by chapter and then later I added descriptions. After that I added more plot. I think it became a bit cluttered that way. This time I have details from the original and it's just a matter of picking and choosing.

It's time to begin writing.

Time to tidy up and look at what I have, whether I succeeded or I've at least improved the book and my understanding of what I did.